I like this poem, but if it were me, I would simplify it. I have an English degree and I had to stop and think what some of the words meant, which disrupted the flow. Hemingway was successful because he wrote in a direct style. Shakespears plays appealed to the common man, even the histories. Something to consider. Not everyone operates on your linguistic level.

I really liked it. it was definetly alittle over exagerated at times, bu ti feel that it added to the meaning and complete feeling that it puts out. sometimes it was hard to follow but in most of it you were dead on. I really liked::
"The taste and smell of death
Have filled the sterile, lifeless earth
Where desolate silhouettes roam with no purpose.
Inhospitable Loneliness is no longer subject to chance"

I agree alot with Bill ...
Except I didn't have to stop and think what some of the words meant ....I had to stop to look them up for their meaning ..LOL
Which got me a little lost and confused..
Very impressive I'm sure to the overly intelligent mind ....but to this simple mind it was very (puzzling).....
Anyways sorry I'm not much help but I'm off to read some of your other poems ....
Dang !!! I hate it when those half my age are more intelligent than me or is it I .....English definately wasn't my major ..hehe ~Hugs sweets~

Wow.. you certainly have a very wide vocabulary... but amazing poem, as always. you're extremely talented. keep it up!
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Como siempre tus poemas son muy buenos. Escribeme y te embiare mi nuevo nombre...para que leas mis poemas...5/5 great poem and keep it up.

Fantastic poem. the wide vocabulary used ensured a lack of repition which you so often find.

5/5 well done

May also try, and fail, their love to hold
Knowing not that all such attempts are vain,
I think you should re-write these two lines. I understand it, but it can't hold up the poem, if you know what I mean.
Laugh at the one who loved and lost his stance.
You should shorten that up a bit or re-write it.
appalling
It's a good word, but it doesn't go well in the poem in this case. Try an alternet word.
Over-all, another strong, meaningful poem. Bravo. But this time I must give a 4/5, because of a few bumps and bruises as I read it.

You are an AWESOME writer, and im still waitin on the one you said you'd write for me...lol...love brittany

That was really deep. I thought it had a nice flow to it. Keep up the good work. *5/5*