by Carmen Nov 2, 2005
category :
Life, society /
other
*I didn't really know what category to put this in, so I just stuck it under life. Please tell me what you think* |
by PS
I like most of it. it sort of sad and gently. but i dont really understand the ending. |
by AnAstAciA
Thats very beautiful....with this poem, i can tell that you are e very nice person...good for you.....5/5.....Check mine as well and write your comments i will appreciate that..... |
It's a good poem. i know how you feel too. this happened to me before...though i regreted it later. but now it's even more difficult. great poem though. |
by Jamie
This situation sucks i know, so sorry bout that, anyways though this was a good poem a bit choppy in some areas but the overall flow is good the only spot worth pointing out is the very last stanza the last stanza is an important one in every poem the one you wrote for this is really bad it dosnt flow whatsoever it does rhyme but you can't tell because the flow is so off, id think about rewritng it but thats the only bad thing about this so 5/5 great job |
by Jesse Ray
Kind of a shaky start, but a powerful middle. I would take out the last stanza and just add the first and third line of the last stanza together with the fifth stanza. Just so that the rhythm would stay the same throughout the poem. |