Used or unused it lays at you feet. should you be your? other than that it is a great write and a postive end was great i like your origanality, your a great poet great great great

Excellently written piece of poetry. The flow was flawless as well as the structure of the poem. My favorite stanza was,

"Past, like present, is a vibrant gift.
Used or unused it lays at you feet.
Why not keep and learn from what you have.
Rather than wish away every single experience"

As you stated, many people don't realize what they have untill they take a step back and relax for a moment and take it all in. So many people go day-to-day, year-to-year with their lifes flying past them, if they took the time perhaps they would see the underlying meaning of life. "The pursuit of happiness" which is living life to it's fullest, be it with love, friendships, family or whatever the matter may be.

Wonderful write, I enjoyed the read, keep writting.

Peace, Joe

Everyday passes without a single glimpse.
People moving about like busy little ants.
Those few who stop, and look at what they see.
Some might be suprised at the colors of their current scene.

^i love it. the flow was amazing. the love the last 2 lines here. stop for a moment n see whatcha got in fornt. nice. i love it

Past, like present, is a vibrant gift.
Used or unused it lays at you feet.
Why not keep and learn from what you have.
Rather than wish away every single experience.

^isnt you post to be "your feet" nice. without experience we wnt be ready or strong enough of what hits in life. thatz what i got from here. n strong message para mi.

Dont take for granted what you really have.
Enjoy the day and always push ahead.
Raise your hand and ask your question.
Give a helping hand when the situation arises.

^these lines remind me of my friends. cuz they are always pushing me to try n to keep on going even wen things are hard. n raise ur hand ask ur question reminds me of skool. nice. i reallie love this part.

Smile again, the day is brand new.
Laugh again, or else the joke is on you.
Kiss again, or you might forget how.
Love again, because you should enjoy yourself.

^nice way of closing your poem here. i love it. amazing job from beginning to end. keep it up!!
5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

Honestly, this poem was really beautiful. I get the sense that you're a fan of writing poetry which is meant to inspire people and give them a sense of hope in the world. You did that with this poem. I felt very happy reading it, and it put a smile on my face.

There were just a few things I feel I need to point out:

"Raise your hand and ask your question.
Give a helping hand when the situation arises."

^^ You use the world 'hand' in both of these lines that are right next to each other. That kind of messes with the flow, I just didn't like it.

Lastly, although the poem ends on a very positive note, it feels a bit like an anti-climax. "You should enjoy yourself." -- It's just not... powerful to me.

Overall though, it is a very beautiful poem.

I like how you write your poems it is easy to read and understnd what you mean