Piercingly sad...cheer up...
Um, look who's talking now.

-beth

Wow 82 visits and 1 votes now 2 I like it its really good

Aww.. i like it.. a lot.. but you shouldn't chop the sentences up as much.. but thats just me.. it was good though.. lenee.

'All I want is to
do is hold you'
Is it 'all i want is to hold you' or 'all i want to do is to hold you' ? 'cause it sounds kind of weird to me.

'If I had, I never
would of said those'
Is it '...I never would have said those'?

Anyway, I like the structure of this poem, it's different and unique. I like how each line links to the other. The emotions going in here is deep and it's felt. Short it is, it's enough to express what you've intended. Nice work.

I like the way that you expressed yourself in this poem...you are really good for a beginer

Wow...im sry if this is tru. thats pretty sad....u used gr8 emmotion again though, n i luvd it...keep up the excellent work...5/5 again!
~*Who Cares?*~

I like the meaning, the only thing i have to comment is that it was a tinge choppy =) might consider combining some things

This is defenatly a very sad poem... you should have put it in sad poem catagory... I like it though, it brings out emotion.
A couple of lines could have flown better, but for the rest I think it rocks!

so.. how is Pensylvania these days? I used to live there =P

take care of yourself,
Natasha

Omg, amazing, almost speachless..i loved it
Luv Em

Wow i can relate, man i feel like im gonna cry now, that reminded me alot of my friend....