That was a fantastic poem Darien. You've really captured various feelings and managed to identify them all as one. I really like this piece- keep up the good work ;)

Much love and God bless,
FalLEN*-

P.S
*The moon bleeds red again,
blood has been spilled tonight.
Tears fall from my face,
for the hearts that are broken.*- Beautifully written. :)

Oh goodness...

I am upset that I never took the time to read any of your poems before. This is ver good, I have no words to describe this poem to you.

I thought I wouldn't like it because it didn't rhyme, and boy was I wrong.

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

Excelent job once again. You have a great talent. It was extremely well written. It flowed very nicely.

Im so absorbed by this story, its really well written throughout! I can definetley see some similarities in oru work, its quite amusing and almost...eerie to see your same concepts expressed through different words. I love how so far in each dual part the last stanza of the first 'part' referrs to the change in the moon which then leads to the change in the idea of the next part.

I enjoyed these parts... Really gut wrenching. Great stuff :)

Nice i a loving it on to the next 5/5

That's so sad. atleast it didnt really happen (i hope) Great job!~

A t0uching piece.deep and very well written

Darien,
Can we ever get enough? lol your poems are sooooooooooo great! I can't find any words to describe the beauty of your poetry... touching and wonderfull poem Darien!

Wow, dark stuff, but I guess I know how you feel. It will never cease to amaze me how people can communicate so much whilst keeping to a such a well formed structure! I love your writing, keep it up!

Hmm. Pretty cool, I like how you were inspired by that song. Yes, this is a dark poem, I get pretty good imagery at the part where she's bleeding and your smiling..good stuff.

Great one really

Cool poem