Thats so sad... but the second stanza sounded kinda awkward, considering you had an ABCB pattern going on and you used the same word for the B. sorry, i notice those little things :) lol. otherwise, amazing. so sad and descriptive

So sad and emotional...I know how hard life can be and I hate this pain I have inside, but hunni please be strong, life can only get better...

Much Love Sabrina

Excellent job i love this poem and i love the flow
well done
love always
tabby

Ruby,
I liked this poem, though not as much as i liked your entry, i thought it was very well written and i enjoyed reading it. There were a few, in my opinion, lines that could be a little better. in the third stanza i think that the third line could sound better if instead of saying 'The thread when new was as white as snow' it should say 'that when was new, was as white as snow' this is just my opinion but i am a very picky person so sont get mad!...lol.
Other than that i thought it was very good!
♥ Lauren

Hey.. il ike this one alot. the word juz flow... keep ur good job.. take care...

Nice poem.....liked it...5/5!

The imagery in that poem is beautiful - and the flow,rhyming, meaning all just seem toclick into place :)

Peace. [Sole]

The lies you spun me

With the fourth sentence in that stanza also ending in me, I think it'll sort of take the impact of it. Maybe just, "The lies you spun" It's up to you.

Haunting picture though, reallly sad, but I love how you made something ordinary like stiching into something so different like mending a broken heart. A different take on the usual things.

Yes I know, I've already commented, so I won't count this as a comment, but I just had to comment again. That poem was absolutely amazing, maybe I didn't read it properly the first time, but it was absolutely awesome. Well done.

Peace. [Sole]

Hmm.Hmm.Hmm..I like it. You really do have some talent Ruby, your poems are fantasic.