Hmm...it does rhyme...but not good enough...hmm...I can't rhyme my own poems..so...I can't give you any suggestion...but I think you should fix the last stanza...the color white?that stanza...lol...that's all...neway...it's good...

Hahahaha.....Very funny poem although in the word height you spelt it hight.So Matthew you have should fix that part but other than that I see no mistakes.

Kool, confusin but kool. plz read and comment sum of mine.

Very nice,confusin but funny
good job
if you can plz read some of mine

Im not into this kinda stuff
wierd poem...but nonetheless its nice...
i write poems from the heart. end of story.
hehe read my poem if you cry

Good poem piglet

Good poem, I liked it,

Well its was good.. but pipe and like dont rhyme with any of it. but thats the only thing i see. i was a funny poem lol

Nice poem I read it this weekend

I love your poems! my favorite part of this one is about if someone tells you who you like the youll run after them and hit them in the head with a meatal pipe! lol that part got me rolling on the floor! well c-ya around.
if you have time please take time and read and comment on some of my poems. it means a lot to me...
-thornton

Im confuzzled............v. good.
trappedxoxox
could u comment on mine if u have time