I like the way you expres things. but dang the syllables dont match very well. dont get me wrong, its good, but i dunno. some lines have rhythm. some dont. then i get all discombobulated (hehehe) and forget about meaning, and think about syllables. its cool though. comment on some of mine! ~*nancy*~

This poem is pretty good keep on writing

THATS AWSUM!

I love it, is soo real and deep in the same time.

Really good keep it up

Andrew that was an AWESOME poem i really feel that way too

Excellent poem, keep up the good work my friend =D.

Much love and God bless,
FalLEn*-

That really beautiful. =) xxxAidoxxx