UNDERNEATH

by myshiningstar14   Nov 6, 2005


BENEATH THE SHELTER OF THE UN-CONTROLLED INNOCENCE, AND UNDERNEATH THE HOLLOW SHELL THAT YOU POSSES, LIES THE LITTLE GIRL WITH-IN.
YOU LIE AWAKE WONDERING, WHAT'S IT GONNA TAKE? YOU EVEN THOUGHT FOUND THE YOU INSIDE, DADDY'S LITTLE GIRL.
SEARCHING YOURSELF, YOU SLOWELY BEGIN MOLDING YOURSELF AND UNDERNEATH IT ALL; YOU CAN FEEL YOURSELF CHANGING.
UNDERNEATH IT ALL, YOU PRETEND TO BE SOMEONE YOU WEREN'T, CONSTANTLY LYING TO YOURSELF, AND DECIEVEING THOSE AROUND YOU.

**PLEASE COMMENT** LISSA

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  • 17 years ago

    by Sara_Nicole

    Hmm.this Poem Make me want to think whicih is rare in my case. Are you talking about Sexual Abuse of some sort?? Or is it just depression??

  • 18 years ago

    by The Poetic Child

    WoW i found a poem i didnt vote and comment yet....Nice job..well written..but the caps is just wierd...
    5/5 ttyl sometime
    PeAcE
    ~The Poet~

  • 19 years ago

    by myshiningstar14

    Yeaa i agree....it coulda been better
    LISSA

  • 19 years ago

    by SilentSymphony

    I feel the flow of this poem could have been more rythmatic. But thats not important. I feel this is a very good piece. Some wordings could be more thought out. but over all ... it was good.

    This kinda sounds like my poem 'underneath' O_o
    ------------------------------------
    Underneath her clothes and skin.
    Hidden within her words and eyes,
    is a place thats so cold, and so ugly.
    And shes scared as hell.
    Scared at the thought of feeling.
    Wide awake, and keeping distance,
    Nothing seems to penetrate her.
    Shes scared as hell.
    I'm frightened too.
    wide awake, and keeping distance from my soul.
    I am scared like her.
    Not feeling whole.

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