Very good theme. Strong yet smooth. Keep this work up and you could be looking at a career in poetry.

It has a wierd structure, some great points, and a wonderful storyline. It has a sarcastic feel to it to, if that makes sense.

I totaly agree with this poem 100 percent you did a good job of writing it

See, this was a little too repetitve for my taste, but at the very end you made a good point, and if I wasn't suicidal myself I probably wouldve given this another 4. But you did good. The conversation between yourself in the poem was a big part of it. Weird form but it works huh? Look it over a few times, edit it, we might have a new fav authour on the site here.

5/5
Bryce

Goes straight to the point! 5/5

Yup... make sense to kno.. L:-DL.. This is niceee, love it.

I think if the lines between the 'So What's were the same length, the piece would flow a little better. The piece, for me, didn't hold too much water, I didn't really get anything from it, no real emotion, story, power, etc.

Brad

Awwh, Isaac..I love reading your poems. They are so cute, and amazing..and you rock monkey faces..and yeahh..hehe...ya gotta love your dorky friends..lol...but this is an awesome poem..i rated you 5/5.

P.S.
please comment some of mine, i got lots of new ones. :] thanks.

much love.
Ashley. <3