You realy are great with your rhyms

Well, first off you confuse me with the line "I wonder in vane what could have been." because you spell it "vane" and "vain" throughout your poem.

Otherwise I really enjoy the idea.

Wonderful poem, gleaming with clarity and flawless flow.

Great read!!

Your friend
Hayley

The flow was nice adn the choice of words was good. i really liked the message though. u are definately a thinker and it shows in ur writing. fantastic job

Aw wow omg, this is amazing, I loved it wow, the last verse was just amazing, it made me imagine a beautiful girl with a rose for some reason, I think its beautiful well done, take care