Wow, I really liked this one. I see that the unfortunate flaw that P&Q has (when you enter a poem it enters weird symbols into every apostrophe) has effected you aswell, which makes some parts hard to read... But the poem itself is really well written! Great job!

Very, very good. You did a very good job. Congratulations. Very nice change of rhythm, didn't miss a beat. Keep it up!

Wow....great poem...it sad really sad...great job tho.

Wow I like that, the imagery is great, I especially enjoy the lines
'In a place where its hard to breathe,
Sometimes I just wonder how long my blood will seethe'
Thats probab;y because I like the word seethe..
Ok Im getting weird now, best post the comment!

I love your use of words, this poem is great, you've done an awsum job! well done!...............luv em

That was so good.i really could relate to how you feel.keep it up...

~the one and only complexchild

I absolutely loved this poem! it was amazing...it reminds me of some areas in my life...i loved it! it was very vague yet specific...made u rly think...and i believe thjats wut good poetry should do...
love ya lots,
sore

This is painful, but wonderfully expressed! 5/5

This was okay. I think the best thing about this piece was some of the rhymes, like 'trust - adjust'. I think that this piece also needed to have the lines at a simular length, to help it flow better.

Brad