This is a very powerful poem.

btw in answer to your question, yes i am a goth.

Omg. That poem was so touching. I loved it. Great Job!

I really love this poem. I red it twice. Its beautifull.

I especially like this part :
lie me on a bed of roses
thorns and buds alike.
That represents the way I live
To heaven now I'll hike

EXCELLENT!!!

Awww... it was all sad! I figured since you commented on a million of my poems I'd go for some of yours! I really liked the last stanza... "I didn't bleed my body dry,
or choke on crystal tears" so pretty...

OMG that was another great poem!!!!!
Great work Suz
Thanx for all your kind comments

I really love this poem, especially the part about crystal tears, that's an image I really love and use in a lot of my own poetry. Beautifully written, well done.
*VioletRaven*

Amazing flow and loved the word choice. The choice of crystal tears was excellent and yet all was exceptional.
~Faith

OMG, i read this poem, dangg its good! keep up the good work!!

headdurr

Your poem is great,effective words and feelings,i like it alot as it's also sad and i love sad poems,keep it up,and i'm so happy that you too like my poems ;)

Awesome, utterly Awesome

Matto

Amazing. im kind of lost for words....
so beautiful
one of your very best.

Ruby

Omg, awh that brought tears to my eyes. You are a wonderful writer with alot of talent. and i really look forward to reading mor eof your poems!

Wow, that was an intersting take on cutter, and believe me I have written many such poems and read many written by others. It is such a horrible was to loose a life, because no one knows you are even struggling. The person carries their heavy load all alone, and no one sees she is dying until she's already gone. It's a lesson to reach out to others who aren't part of the crowd, who are distant, outsiders, because everyone needs a friend. Some try drugs, and knifes, but these methods are only friendly for a little while and in the end the person is left all alone. You illistrated this story well, though there were a few spelling errors and the third section does not rhyme like all the other ones do, just a thought. Nice work.

-Tainted Mikochan

I liked it but it started to loose me intrest after the first 2 stanzas. 4/5

That was so sad, it was truthful and deep and full of emotion.
i loved every part of that
xx

This was a really emotional piece. It was full with passion and depth of sadness that was really well written. I don't think i've heard a poem about a topic like this written in such a way. Its really unique.

Kat

Again a powerful beautiful poem that I can relate a lot to and feel. Cutting is a powerful trap the keeps so many of us chained to it's power. You have an way of painting the world in your view through your poems, making topics that already have been written about time and time before, shine out like the were brand new. You have a gift for talent and expression and a gift for telling the stories of this world through your pen.
"But someone locked he doors" Here I think it was supposed to be "the" doors, not "he" doors. Just a small thing that you might want to fix.

-Tainted

How tragic... but the way you expressed it was beautiful. The first and last stanza were my favorite, and I found no immediate flaw. Great Job!

Love it! you have a really amazing talent for someone so young! keep on writting! great job!

That was sad. :(

Great work though. I am going to check out more of yours later on today.
Keep it up.

>black&&blue