Great job. love the poem

Thankyou so much for checking out my poems I just started doing this and i have been having trouble getting poeple to rate and comment on my poems, could you please check out my other work

I can relate.. i dont know if youve been through it but it sucks doesnt it?.. i hate depression but it runs through my family.. great job!! lenee.

Cute somehow, but still deep.
You could have used a little rhyme but the flow was okay.

Good Writing!
beth

I luv this poem, its quite deep really! 5/5 jesxx cud comment on some of mine?? please jesxx

This made no sense to me when i 1st read it...but the 2nd time i read it it made perfect sense...i have to give oyu a 5/5 because thats what u really deserve...5/5

Great. Your doing well.
Try to catch the readers eye straight away, and keep the poem flowing well.
Good job though, keep it up
Tara-Kay

Omg if this is tru ur EXACTLY like me...even tho i am gettin help, i cant imagine being happy...its wierd...anyway...gr8 poem. easy 2 relate 2...5/5!
~*Who Cares?*~

Great poem very easiy to relate to for many people.

I like the differentiation this poem has. I like the way you wrote it in a simple paragraph like way. Sometimes this doesn't work, but you did it in the right way, however that is. A couple of suggestions are the third and fourth line read as one big sentence, and it is a mouthful to read. This is a little off putting, and it also happens with the ending five lines. Punctuation or naturally breaking these lines down would make this easier to read. Overall, this was a thought-provoking poem. Thanks for sharing.

You have quite the abstract writing style. its very unique, i like it.... *5/5*

Thats really good i can relate to it a lot thanks for the comment by the way and i give u a 5/5

You have such talent, i really enjoyed this poem

I really like this poem! I can relate it to:) well mostly lol. Good Job! u have a lot of emotion in it.

Great job. It was a very well done poem. Keep up the good work.

It seems like you could have said more and therefore made a stronger ending to your thoughts.

But I can relate completely. And that's the best talent any writer can have.

Great job, i know exactly the feeling. 5/5 jesx