I like this poem a lot.

the rhyming is suttle so doesn't distract from the actuall run of the poem, but is still there enough to tie it together.

Exellent work!! it flows so well, and there is alot of emotion that can be felt by the reader. well done

Ruby

Hmmm it was very nice! In Fact I wrote a poem almost the same... obviously different words but... the same idea. well that sucks lol, oh well I have to say I like urs waay better!

Oh my, this is deep, I loved it ;o FANTASTIC BRILLIANT WOW, I can definetly relate to this very well done my dear, Your poems do not need critisism they speak for themselves, true beauty love, take care

Haylo,
This is excellent! Very well written and the flow was constint! This is really deep and very sad I liked how you asked if they saw you smile resently.
I loved all your word usage, it was very good and helped the flow. You put so much emotion into this and it turned out really good, you should be proud. well done x)

So sad, but so powerful.....it's some pretty good work. I really enjoyed it.

Nice one! I love this kind of deep poems!

I can realte and i like this poem for that reason, it is well written and a you are very talented
love Tara xxx

I love this piece. Not that I have any clue what "shirk" means. XP lol It's really awesome... I love reading your stuff. Kind of makes me feel less... great... at writing... But... Wow.

Very touching indeed & deep
love
amy

The poem was great, but I hope you feel better :( The thing I liked the most is that you can really feel the pain that you describe so well.