I loved this poem...so dark yet so beautiful at the same time...wonderful...Joclyn

'Choosing death over she herself.'
I feel that if it's 'death over her' would flow better, but, maybe it's just me. =)

'She was looking at him seriously'
Maybe change intensely, intently, painfully, I don't which word fits but I feel that seriously feels kind of off in this line. But still, maybe it's just me. =)

Anyway I really enjoyed this. It tells a story, a tale, a rather dark and enchanting one. Your first and last stanzas really link together so well, it's perfect, very magical. Lots of emotions going round here too, the love of the Mabelle, the love of the magician, both are different, yet they're willing to do anything for this love of theirs. Brilliant, you kept me going to the very end.

I like it can you please read my poems i need peoples opions

Truly amazing
cant get anough of your poems
youve now been added to my favourites
xxx

I love this poem it is really good. the story is deep and really captures the reader. great job

This is a nice poem....but 2 b honest, im not sure writing "The End" at the finish was a really nice way to end it. but all the same, nice poem. thanx for your honest comments on my poems, if u cud do any more id be grateful! your the only person so far who has answered really honestly! jesx

Interesting poe,

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