Immortal Soul

Very thoughtful. Very deep. I like it. Good creative sence to it as well.

Try and avoid using so many "I's" and "A" and yeah. Some parts of the poem I didn't like much, cause there wasn't really much of a flow happening, nor rhyming. BUT, not all poems have to be like that, so I guess this makes this poem different to alot of poem I normally read, which is a good thing. I liked the last line the most, thought it was great. Keep it up!

Natalie``

I like this peice, it is well written and an iteresting consept which has been very well explored. it maybe lacked depth in parts... but other than that a great well written peice.

I love vampire poems! This poem is well written.

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