'A girl can dream can't see?'
Is it '...can't she' ?

Obsession with vamp and Harry potter? haha, me too!

Ah.. this poem tells a story of a vampire, and how she has felt after being immortal, nice idea. But I'd really love to see more to this poem, like maybe more emotions to go with it? anyway, maybe it's just me. :D Nevertheless, I like it.

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I love vampire poems! This poem is well written.

I like this peice, it is well written and an iteresting consept which has been very well explored. it maybe lacked depth in parts... but other than that a great well written peice.

Try and avoid using so many "I's" and "A" and yeah. Some parts of the poem I didn't like much, cause there wasn't really much of a flow happening, nor rhyming. BUT, not all poems have to be like that, so I guess this makes this poem different to alot of poem I normally read, which is a good thing. I liked the last line the most, thought it was great. Keep it up!

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Very thoughtful. Very deep. I like it. Good creative sence to it as well.