Fantastic! loved it, needless to say.. it had a great bouncy rhythm to it.. and it captured the feelings "perfectly" great ending too,.. short and to the point, i cant say how much i love this and all your other work..

About paths we once trod

maybe replace about with "down".. i dunn0 it just caught my eye and i thought of that as a suggestion.,. wish i could give cone helpful crits, but thats all i got.. keep it up, im waitin for more =O).. pZ out

Speachless... i have tears in my eyes. i can't explain how this poem made me feel. one of the best ive ever read. its so simple. I have to know did you write this about someone?

I liked the message, but not as much as your other stuff.. i think you'd benefit by being a lil bit more subtle; specifically..

Its not fair we all know it
He shouldnt be gone
But in our hearts
He will always live on

i see the idea you have, but it just seems so plain.. anyway, i think maybe beefing it up with some imagery and working out those "trite" ideas.. anyway, i did like it th0, especially the ending.. i hate funerals myself and avoid em at all costs, but its a good message that i think could be stronger with a lil reworking..