by Forsaken Redeemer Nov 11, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
Took a penny from my pocket, |
The title hinted of the ending and I thought that the flow was good not choppy. The words fell together quite well. The ending..nicely done. |
Hey:) great poem. its really cleverly written, good twist at the end:) |
by xX-jess-Xx
I really love how you write! its hard to explain....but,i love your dark ones, theyre so moving. thanks for the comment by the way! jesxx |
Hey there your poem was really good. how i wish i was dead as well! |
Wow..I loved it..I love the end..its so suprising and unexpected..Awesome..Love Joclyn |