'Lover of the this night'
Should it be '...of the night' or '...of this night' ?

'In the darkness is were you stay'
Is it '...is where you stay' ?

'Take your wings and take flight.'
I find that 'take' seems weird here, maybe spread would be a better word? I'm not sure, maybe it's just me, if that is so, ignore me. =)

I like the way this poem rhyme and how it links from line to line. Dark with a hint of mysterious. I've enjoyed this. =)

Hey, i really liked this poem. i'm a vampyre at heart, and would love to truly become one. anyways, great poem.