No, no, no. This deserves such a higher rating that what it presently is. This has emotion, and true beauty that a love poem should have. It is original, which I’m sure you know is hard to get from a love poem. I could really feel your words. I see the idea of the title competition wasn’t so bad after all, I mean this poem came from it. Thanks for sharing.

Another well written poem. i liek the unusual rhyming scheme hing. one of the rhymes seems a teensey bit forced,m the "magnificent and adoring" bit. but its probably just personal opinion. great poem!...do you mind if i comment on lots of yours? i have nothing better to do.
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