I really like this.I can really relate to this,heartbreakingly so.It's got a strong start, love the first lines and the last line phrased so uniquely, it makes it somewhat unexpected.Some of the lines seem too long(or that could happen in posting-I knew there is little control in the form/shape of posting a poem),the rhyme scheme flows smoothly.And the strongest point is your ability to convey emotion.Very touching, very well written.

Wow i love this one too and i want to dedicate it to my baby ... i feel the same way about him right now...keep up the great work...5/5 u deserved it..and keep up the great work

Well I just want through all your poems and all of them tell of my life also thank you 4 putting my thoughts to words keep up the good work 5/5 to all of them

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