Fade Away

by MizCrowley   Nov 14, 2005


When those you loved
Have gone away
And the good you wish
You cannot say
And you feel your life
Just slip away
And there is nothing
To just make it stay
These are the times
When you have lost all hope
And when this happens
You cannot cope
This is when you feel
The pain at hand
A pain once silent
A pain once bland
And when you feel your life
Just slip away
And those you loved
Have gone away
And the good you wish
You cannot say
Then your only wish
Is to fade away

-Whispre

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  • 18 years ago

    by WtrmlnLvr

    Thanx on your comment.....this poem is really good... i liked the ryhme scheme!!! Its so true!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Burn It Baby. ! .

    Thanks for my comment
    it helps :]
    i just get feeling like that at times lol
    thanks
    btw your poem is amazing :]
    xxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Ery good peice, only problem i have is that you may have overused the word "away" slightly esspessially near the end.

    "And those you loved
    Have gone away"

    prehapse if the "away" here was changed to "astay" or something simmilar it would help the peice run smoothly. but this is only a suggestion and by no means a requirment.

    the peice flows well thoughout and is very clearly written.

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Rachel

    This is wonderful. I can relate.
    You're a great writer!

  • 18 years ago

    by Esther Wathen

    I was under quotes and read ur quote saying "plz read my poem!" i was a little annoyed but went anyway to read it and now i am really glad that i did, keep writing!

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