WOW!! This is GREAT! I hope you continue to write more.

Ummmmmmmmm......i am sorry you are still sad...is this how you feel??? still?? wish i could be there for you......... $tiki$

I like it. I can understand it and relate to it. Keep it up. :)

Interesting format, I love the idea my only suggestion is worry less about rhyming and speak more from the heart. You have a lovely way with words but sometimes therhyming takes away from the obvious sad emotions of the piece. All in all a nice work!

Its good. Sad but good. Keep up the good work

I was under quotes and read ur quote saying "plz read my poem!" i was a little annoyed but went anyway to read it and now i am really glad that i did, keep writing!

This is wonderful. I can relate.
You're a great writer!

Ery good peice, only problem i have is that you may have overused the word "away" slightly esspessially near the end.

"And those you loved
Have gone away"

prehapse if the "away" here was changed to "astay" or something simmilar it would help the peice run smoothly. but this is only a suggestion and by no means a requirment.

the peice flows well thoughout and is very clearly written.

5/5

Thanks for my comment
it helps :]
i just get feeling like that at times lol
thanks
btw your poem is amazing :]
xxxx

Thanx on your comment.....this poem is really good... i liked the ryhme scheme!!! Its so true!!!