by Cuddles Nov 14, 2005
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
I don't want to, but I have to give you up. |
by Void
Hey, that's really good. The rhyme scheme was really different, not quite with a good rhythm to it (too many syllables to be read), but because of its unique quality, rather than deducting a mark, I'm happy giving you the 5/5 that is deserved - the 4.0 that you have now just doesn't seem to make sense to me. Especially with the last sentence, I really loved the ending to that poem, it was excellent. Great job! |
Good poem loove it please read soem more of my poems for instance you might liek Your Beauty, I love you, Your Body- My Winter wonderland, Suicidal Romance and Sw33t Misery! Oh and no ones read Grace healed eyes either lol..well have funn. xxLISSa |
I love the last 2 lines it brings it all together.....amazing! keep it up. xoxLISSAxox |