I love the last 2 lines it brings it all together.....amazing! keep it up. xoxLISSAxox

Good poem loove it please read soem more of my poems for instance you might liek Your Beauty, I love you, Your Body- My Winter wonderland, Suicidal Romance and Sw33t Misery! Oh and no ones read Grace healed eyes either lol..well have funn. xxLISSa

Hey, that's really good. The rhyme scheme was really different, not quite with a good rhythm to it (too many syllables to be read), but because of its unique quality, rather than deducting a mark, I'm happy giving you the 5/5 that is deserved - the 4.0 that you have now just doesn't seem to make sense to me. Especially with the last sentence, I really loved the ending to that poem, it was excellent. Great job!