I shouldn't

This is really strong & emotional but once again I think that you should maybe add some more details to it. The poem in itself is very strong...Great job on it! 5/5**

Whose deah? shed some light on ure words,that wut the poem need . otherwise, it's good

best of luck

U tell a stpry using rhym and quistions yet u make it powerful. i dont really like your style i dont thikn u put enough feeling into your poems but i have to admit its pretty good. like the lines
"but will i be judged forever?
will his death forever hang over me?"

i think its the bit with feeling

I like the way you tell the story with questions. Sometimes too many questions made the poem's flow seem awkward, but I think this is fine. This is definitely very different from your first poem. But good job in this as well. The feelings you portrayed were felt, truly felt. But I feel that maybe add a few more lines to clearer state what had really happened. Just my 2 cents. =) Nonetheless, nice write!

That was really strong and had a really nice flow to it. i like this part

"but will i be judged forever?
will his death forever hang over me?"

it was pretty powerful