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I liked it, it had an interesting concept behind it, but it kind of lacks originality.

The room which seems so big
The tears which cause so much pain
Each day which just drags on

Those are the lines I'm speaking of..theres a fine line between bland, and making things too metaphorical to the point where it doesnt make sense..you need to find a balance between the two, and I'm sure you'll be surprised with the outcome..keep it up!

Interesting write. The fact you carried the ending of a line to the beginning of the next was quite clever, and I really liked this. The subject wasn't all that special, but it worked nonetheless. The use of more creative words could enhance you work greatly. Keep writing.

This was really good. I loved how you explained it! It was truely wonderfull. Keep up the great work 5/5

- Natalie x-x

Aww, so amazing, so sad, so emotional, so well written. great job
xxxxxx

Hm... I don't like leaving comments that say "oh, how nice" and "I like this" but... I do... I like this. ^_^ I like how you started each new sentence with the last few words of the one before...

-Carissa-