Comments : Broken

  • 18 years ago

    by ratchild666

    This poem proves ur great at expression emotions. its really effective. and i love this line:

    My hearts tired of this play.

    stef/xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Dreams

    I really like your first 2 stanzas, it is strong and deep. However though, the transition between the second and third stanza is kind of abrupt. Still, maybe it's just me. =)

    Nonetheless, thanks for sharing this heartfelt piece. =)