I believe that better spelling would have made the poem so much better. but I definitely got the idea, though I never really liked the expression
"papito." Too latin for me.

Good Writing!
beth

Hey ma, like the concept and what you have to say...nice words. But if you dont mind me saying, the flow of the poem is kind of bouncy. Maybe if you wrote it like this:

Como olvidar las lagrimas,
Las sonrisas que compartimos
No podre nunca papito
Yo soy tuya desde el principio

Y te amare asta el final
Todos pueden ver cuanto
Se que tu lo ves tambien
Y que sientes lo mismo

Pero que puedo hacer?
Solo llorar lagrimas por ti
Porque tu ya no estas
Porque no estas junto ami

I dont know just a suggestion. Love ya gurl, and tell your friend nice job....

::MELI::

Congrats on being the first Spanish poem I've read on this site! I liked it, especially the first three lines. Keep on writing!

Wazz up, I originally saw the first original spanish part but I didn't comment on it cuz I was busy but I agree with Rican C, it is a little choppy and bouncy but I see now that you changed it a bit. I like your idea though, itz straight. Para la proxima vez que escribas un poema en Español, te aconsejo que te lo leas en voz alta a ti mismo. De esta manera, podras encontrar unos cuantos erores que probablemente no habias visto y lo podras cambiar. Buena suerte en el proximo poema. I can't wait to read it. Cuidate. Alratoz mija.

~La Loka~

That was a nice poem and i unda stand wat u tryin to say

Me encanto tu poema bien bonito... keep wriitin gurl and i hope he comes back 2 you si es possible... ciao 5/5

That was really good. i need to write one. im mexican and i can never get anything that good so i just give up and i forget about them. anyways i really liked it. keep writing and your talent will get better.

I like this poem... real sweet.
keep it up and propz. =)

Laterz,
La Boricua!

Tu poema es muy muy muy bien
muy bonito

Hey its a good poem very nice of you for your ex's i think its really sweet!
keep it up!
xxx