Depression

by Once an Angel   Nov 15, 2005


You gripped me hard by my arm,
but then, eased me deeper by your charm.
I looked around, I was all boxed in
I felt overpowered by your malevolent grin.

I did everything all wrong,
I played a sharp key, in a flat song.
You used me as a puppet, and you my puppeteer,
As you lead me deeper, faded all hope, once near,

You yanked my heart strings taut,
and blinded my eyes to light, that I soon forgot.
You laid siege upon my metal wall,
you crushed my esteem and watched it fall.

Your whisper clouded my mind,
and covered all, once good and kind.
You made me never see any good,
and deceived me, into feeling misunderstood.

I thought there was no one by my side,
and all those who talked of love had lied.
I only felt you, strangling my soul,
slowly inching toward your goal.

I was drowning, under your forced weight,
sinking deeper, into my fate.
I thought I had come to the book's dark end?
When another came to save me, a real friend.

Yeah, this poem means SOOO much to me that it is not even funny. I hope you like it. The friend at the end at first was my best friend Joey, but I fell again and was saved by my ex Mike, then fell further still only to be saved by my knife, until now, I am slowly climbing back up again, this time on my own. Please rate and comment! I love suggestions!

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    It seems sometimes like about 75% of the people on this site are depression sufferers, and in all honesty I would say 75% of those are increedibly BAD at characterizing their struggle effectively. But this is good. This makes me want to read it through to the end. It takes simple forms and a very basic poetic structure and weaves it into something gently compelling.

    And for that you are to be commended. I don't hand out 5s very often. :-)

  • 18 years ago

    by Ren

    OMG! This poem is freaking AWESOME! KEEP IT UP! If you keep writing then I'll keep reading! GREAT JOB! You're in my faves! Loved it. 5/5 all the way!

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    The poem concept was good and since it ws basedon real life you were able to make the reader feel the emotions going through the lines. When I found out there as a knife involved in your explaination I kind of got weirded out, no offence. I just don't like to have the image of blood in my mind lol.

    The title was self-explanitory. The stanzas seemed to fit together. It had a lot of elements of a sad poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by Rachel

    This is a wonderful poem!! I can relate to it. It's really well written. And thank you so much for the sweet comment on my poem. I am always here too, if you need to talk or something. I'm a very good listener :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Phoebe

    Well, you commented my poem..And told me to look here..and I did. I'm glad I did. Its a very good poem =)
    Thankyou +hugs+
    x

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