I agree with the other comments here its so great with emotion yet the poem doesnt break in places
I love the flow you used in each line it mas amazing
I really really liked it
=)
great work and I can relate as well
Em

Thats soo sad.... great poem tho you have good style... hope you write more so i can read
Love always Tiffany Heather

I think that some of your verb subject agreement is off. The topic is fine, but the diction could use some work. A little work and this could be turned into a master piece. Depressing, but that is ok. I'm just not a fan of the wallowing.