I really liked it all teh way up to the last line. it didnt fit the flow. maybe change it to maybe,"hope for escape is gone." it just seems like that line doesnt fit.

This one really struck me. Innoncence is a very intriguing concept to me, because of its indescribable nature. Also, I love the questioning of reality... what is it? And then being unable to care for others... not something I've thought about before, but now will have to. You do a very good job hitting on all of these. Thanks as well for giving me something new to ponder!