Well this is *very* good in the flow and rhytem(sp?) and I really did like the idea..
And the poem did rock with your choice of words, But if you could just read me poem "the game of slice and dice" And listen to the last stanza you don't even gotta coment just read it, because like many people I feel/felt that way and I hope you can just buy a new pen =) Instead of risking your life =P Its a great poem, but try to keep writing on -paper- =Dxx

There's great sadness, pain and loneliness here. You portrayed a series of very awful emotions here, which were really felt. I like the whole idea of this poem, from the beginning to the ending, it was very smooth and flow-y. I like it very much. Thanks for sharing. =)