I think it is a good poem, and it is for a friend of yours I'm guessing?
I think you did a good job on writing this, it rhymes and it's sad.. but beautiful at the same time..
well done! though I think I might change a couple of sentances, but I don't think I am a good person to judge on that... I am not a pro. L.o.L

Graet poem, it flows very well and the ryming seems so natural.

Omg claire! thats amazing!
when i read this i seriously started crying! omg im still in shock
thats soo good
luv ya heaps
amy

Thats a really sweet piece Claire! In criquing, make sure your words make sense, like unawares. Check out www.urbis.com its a great new site for constructive critisim.

Hey everyone. yes this poem is about a friend of mine who was going through a bad time and i wanted to express her feelings through this. i hope it brought you justice amy!!

That was really good and I bet your firend will aprasiate that. very nice.xox Rachel

This was very sad, but it was still a very very well writin peice, LOVED IT!! 5/5

Much love Tiffani