Its a good poem with a lot of emotion and a lot to say. My only sugestion is to really go back and paint the images you are trying to say clearly so the reader can get the whole message from this poem. Good job. 4/5

-Mikochan

Wow! thas a wicked poem! sounds like a rap, yeh i woz saying aloud to a tune lol. ur very talented, gr8 poem :) 5/5

mark xxx