Great Way To Show Him That You Are Thinking Of Him!FROM ONE POET TO ANOTHER: It isn't how well a poem rhymes or how it fits together, it the emotion that is expressed... its an Amazing Poem! My only advice to you is to stop worrying about the rhyme and just write how you feel

XOXO
Kayla

Now this is a great poem. It flows well and it has emotion. Keep up the good work. X

Awesome work - no complaints on this one. It all flows along and sounds very poetic - particulary this line 'release your soul right through me' which fit in perfectly. Nice stuff.

WOW this an amazing poem, And I am really sorry about your dad. Keep up all the good work.
Leona

Hey great poem... good way of getting things out... im srry bout ur dad...

"floating along a moutain stream"

mountain* =)

That's all the bad things I can say about this poem.

The imagery is outstanding and the reason why you wrote it is just....well, it leave me speechless.

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

Wow, thisis so good. Its also a good thing that you dont use selfdesrtuction to relief any anger