Great poem. very lobg lol but good

Wow......n i know i say tht 4 alot of poems....but tht ws really amazing. it was long, but great! u told a whole story in a poem of that length, its jus sometimes its really hard to do! well done, 5/5! jesxxx

- awesome *loss of words* 5/5 -

.:yourdirtysecret:.

That was one of the best poems i have read on this site for a while. yoy managed to carry a strong storyline without forcing any of the rhymes. the language was exellent! i really enjoyed reading this.

Ruby

Wow, this poem was truely amazing. It has great imagery. Very dark. It really gets your mind thinking. This poem was pure brilliance.

Oh my god! that was amazing. I'm speechless.. it was such an addicting poem, making you want to read more and more.. wow... It was seriously one of the best poems I've ever read on this website.. Amazing amazing job.. and i'm dead serious when I say this.. you carried it brilliantly for the length and the story was so incredibly addicting and never got dull...

Here are just a few mistakes..

they day they took his favorite toy,
-The?

They day he saw a voodoo doll,
Again--The?

The clue said that they knew they killer,

And lastly again..--the?

But amazing job.. 5/5