by Dumpstead Nov 18, 2005
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
At times when I\'m relaxed, when I\'m at ease, |
I liked the other poem i read much better than this one..the flow in this one was pretty off and i didnt vote for it cause it might bring down your rating. i also dont think you should have differnt rhyme schemes in each stanza, that affects the poem a lot. And i didnt much like the last phase "Color Me BADD"...it really threw of the nice ending you could have had. But thats just my opinion. What i really liked though was this phrase |
I have never really read a poem in the catagory before... Interesting... I'm so jealous how you can get your rhyming perfect >.< I liked: |
by Jessica
Hmm.. This was pretty good.. I felt that some of your rhymes were used just because they rhymed and not because they actually made sense.. The flow was good though except for a few odd lines.. In this, the descriptions were nice and light and actually quite refreshing.. But the way you jumped from subject to subject didn't really appeal to me.. Nicely done though, you have talent 5/5 |
5/5. Very nice poem! Keep it up! |
by Dumpstead
Dear Jane, |