This one is really good!!

5\5

That was an amazing poem with a grrt feel to it....i like the way u break up words and use actual sounds...it gives such emotion to it.....i love the metaphors too the drugs and credit card reference were very orginal....thx for ur shout out and comments.....
love ya lots,
sore

I visualized it really well, even hearing the sounds in my head "BOOM" 5/5 for a very well detailed poem

Loved this one, very deep and itense kept you completely gripped well done

I love the 3x repetition you use. Its very effective in the flow... and it makes the poem more enjoyable to read. I felt like I was getting into it... 5/5

Gruesome poem well written