You are dealing with a difficult subject
to write about but you seem to have
mastered it with your ending...I love the way it flowed through and the way
it started at the beginning to the end.
Excellent.........I'll be back....5/5
Check out the one I wrote
You will always be my last

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Shelby

This poem is very powerful in words and passion. I like the words you use and hope to read more of yours.

I loved it it was so great thanks for the comment!!!!

This poem reflects well the joy and sorrow pleasure and pain of lovers it flowed wonderfully and really made me, think. laugh and cry another masterpiece

You have made such a poignant choice of words, the joy, the rapture, pain and sufffering which lovers face in a relationship are captured so well in this write. Well done.

Warmest regards,

Steve

This is a great poem, it shows that love isnt all just huggs and kisses. It hurts more than anything in the world.
Thankyou for the experience of reading it.

Darkest Wishes
Matt

Hey Hayley, this was an excellent poem. i real work of art.
it had a lot of really great imagery and wonderful use of the english language. keep it up. you really are fantastic.

-Suzie

It was beautiful and i think that you described break up and what happens when your in a relationship, i felt like that with my ex but even though we broke up i remember what we did and what i felt knowing deep down that if i never find a love like that i'll be happy because i experienced it once and i think that's all that matters. Thanks for the comment keep reading and commenting.

Adel you are too funny!! Thank you so much you are very sweet.

Im glad you liked it...Thanks to everyone for your kind words and encouragment means alot to me.

Kisses
Hayley

Breaking up is never easy if you really care for the person, but harder than that is never hooking up with the person you love. Anyway, well done. My only comment is to try and establish a strong rhythm for the piece. Keep writing.

Very clever and evocative Hayley.

Good to see your poem getting the rating it deserves too.

J

Great poem and great job. Love your writing. It's a style that very much inspired me and helps me find either a basis or platform for me to start from.

HJ,
What can I say.....You portrayed the joy and the sorrow which we have all been through at one time or another. great job.....

Love Ann

Sometimes the pain never goes away. we just get used to it. Great poem about a very heartbreaking subject.

This poem..its jus wow...soemtiems i dont understand how people can write so well....but this is exactly what my friend has jus gone thro...thanx for gettin these kinda emotions out for poeple:) it really helps them

Hi Hayley,
nice poem, great is the sorrow of breaking up and great is the joy of making up. the anguish to extreme joy is a story everyone of us have lived with at one time or another in our lives, some of us more than a few times, keep up the great writing and make us all happy, as always your friend harry

Wow thiz poemz wonderful no wordz can express how gud thiz iz!!! u have tru talent keep up tha gud work ur doin gr8!!!!5/5

Hey darl. this was a really g0od p0em. very well writen - g0od use 0f w0rds, t0uching lines with meaning. great j0b! well d0ne! keep it up!
l0tz 0f l0ve / d0ra

This is great u have so much talent. Keep it up. WONDERFUL WONDERFUL!
-HUGSN KISSES!

I loved ur rhyming its really good xox rc