Wow, first attempted. Very thought provoking with much visionary flow. Slightly ambigous in style.
Flow and diction flawless. I really enjoyed it, you are an awe-inspiring talent.

Thank you so much for your kind words and encouragement. I look forward to reading more from you.

Kisses
Hayley

I definately will have to check up more about this style it's intresting and for a first attempt i have to be honest and say i wouldn't have known besides the fact you told me. great job i like the meaning you gave to it!

~Jacklyn

Steven ,
This poem ahhh ... It has so much meaning and truth ..
The style in my eyes was amazing ..

There was not one single piece that I could say didn't fall perfectly in place .
The uniqueness of this write made it really stand out and the title made you want to read it ..

Incredibly genuine write , my friend

So true, these words you've written. everything that we seem to crave for in this world - accomplishment, fame, money and glory seem so trivial when one reads your words -

All our average compliment is three score and ten.

beautiful way of reminding us of the little things my friend.

good luck and happy writing
shobhana

Wonderful penn Steve!!!

This is very intelligently structured... i think i might go check out that link :P See if it offers up any inspiration... typically though, whether it's in music or anything else, i tend not to adhere to anyones given rules or structures, i like progression, which doesn't always leave it flow as well as it could, but well, it's just my bash at things isn't it? Lol Really inspiring write again steve, cheers for checking out my poem, i'd like to feel i was spreading some kind of message. Even if it is at a rate of one convert a week :P

Spafe x

Wow niice. this reminds of the beginning of Days of our lives: "like the sands in an hour glass" that isnt nessacarily a bad thing or a good thing. i just thought i would say.

i love this:
Time is unforgiving and takes no prisoners

awesome job, esp for a first timer. i love the subject and its written very well. :)

Steven I love this style but have to admit I'm new to the different forms. So I will be looking it up. The message in the poem is super.