I really like this, cause I know what it's like to have people look straight through you when you need them to care. Hope that the last stanza doesn't come to pass, it would be a great loss if you stopped writing.
*VioletRaven*

Heylo!
This was a very sad but enjoyable poem.
I have to say I liked it because I know exactly how it feels!
On this stanza "I felt as if I was
Teetering on a ledge,
I think I know what pushed me
Over the edge."

You could work on it to make the flow more like the rest say "I felt as if I was alone,
Teetering on a ledge,
I think I know what pushed me,
Way over the edge."
I dunno, just add a few words in or something make it coolier :D
Well done tho It was a good poem.
Oh and I think you could keep it going a bit longer, the end was sorta rushed, just as I got into the poem, she died.. You should put more about how she felt or something or how she diedin stead of so fast..
Sorry now im just rambeling, lol.
Well done, If I voted id give it 4! xx

"I felt as if I was alone,
Teetering on a ledge,
I think I know what pushed me
Over the my final edge."

"I felt as if I was alone,
Teetering on a ledge,
It was you whom pushed me,
Over the cliffs sharp edge"

I dunno, just trying to help lol.. xx

Suicide's a nasty feeling. I hope you're over it.
The poem had "you guys" mentioned a lot..hum, not necesarily bad or anything, it was quite a good poem, even though it sounded briefly like the person was going to jump, not shoot themselves in the head.

Just my thoughts.

//Truest Lies//

Omg.....this poem is amazing, its so deep and ur word fit so well, keep it up

A good piece and you used you're rhymes really well so it flowed with ease! Try to experiment with your vocabulary and use description and the deepedst throughts and inspiartions you can aquire! THanks for using punctuation too, thats something a lot of poets here miss!
lots of love
Broken.

I love this 1 to its my kind of poem and its horrible wen people treat you as if your not there i feel it most of the time:) xxxjessixxx 5 outta 5 chick

Wow. I really really really LOVE this poem. I can relate to it in so many ways. A lot of what you wrote is how i also feel.

This poem is so powerful and full of emotion. All your rhyms flowed together and in all beautifully written.

I really enjoyed the lines:

"I stuck on my fake smile,
For just a few more days.
Waiting for one of you to ask
If I was okay."

This stanza is what goes through my head a million times a day. I always wonder if others notice you want ot talk to them yet are to afraid to know exactly what is up.

Sorry i'm rambling again lol! Anyways this poem is by far THE BEST! Keep up the amazing work....never stop writing! 5/5
~Luvz~
~Angie~
xoxo

Hey thanxs for the comment . But this is a really good poem 5/5

I enjoyed this poem...it was for lack of a better word...amazing...i cant find a word to even come close....Amazing job.
Emma 5/5

Nice - I agree that

I felt as if I was
Teetering on a ledge,
I think I know what pushed me
Over the edge.

Doesn't seem to flow very well - but the rest of the poem is great - I hope you're ok xXx.

Peace. [Sole]

I know how it feels, when they look through you but when the notice you u wish they didn't.you wish you could just cruise through life with out any more bumps. but not all cars drive well, and not all roads are smooth so we just gotta make sure we have air bags. ok im babbling. good poem. i really got want u were tryna say.
try lookin at some of my poems.
~sarah k ~

This was so sad! The feeling in it would be so hard to feel, and I admire you for being able to deal with it. Great job, 5/5

That was sooo soooo sad!!! *crying*
It was really belivible!!!!! After reading it, I felt like one of my good friends had died.......... Brillent poem though! 5/5 well done!!!! Loved it!!