Hello again,
Maybe try something like
"I go through the same old hell,
Every single day,
It's not like this life,
Will ever gonna be okay."
Just to make it flow better :D
Oh I loved the imaginary in this stanza
"The sadness engulfs me,
Like a fog on the beach,
I'm slowly drifting away,
To a place they can't reach." really great thinking well done!
Again the ending wasn't what I expected, you start off the poems great but end them so sudden... maybe you should talk about the painfull death in this one a lil more?
I dunno.. well done again! I like your work your going on my favs.

My bad.. "I go through the same old hell,
Every single day,
It's not like this life,
Will ever again be okay."

Im pretty stupid and am so tired!! lol :D

Thank you for the helpful comments everyone!
Totally appreciate the great feedback I have been getting.
My future poems will be better :)

Thanks again for reading and taking the time to comment.
Laterz,
Shirlz

Wow... this is awesome! nice job and propz!!! *5/5*

BX Girl

Umm that was very good, nicely written. xox Rach