Very good poem.I like it....very good emotion. |
by N J Thornton
I liked the final two lines of this, however I feel the poem as a whole still needs work. I hope you don't mind me making suggestions, of course you can completely ignore them, just please don't take offence as none is intended. |
by N J Thornton
Sorry I meant improving** |
Aw hun this is so sweet & cute, I think all of us would like a guy like that, Awww, I loved this poem made me smile hehe, You have great talent in ALL of these poems you've written its showcased well, take care hunn this is great work |