Comments : Love For You

  • 19 years ago

    by Switchblade89

    Very good poem.I like it....very good emotion.

  • 19 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I liked the final two lines of this, however I feel the poem as a whole still needs work. I hope you don't mind me making suggestions, of course you can completely ignore them, just please don't take offence as none is intended.
    It is kind of short and could do with extending to make the over all reason of the poem stronger. In the second couplet the tenses seem to be muddled. In the first line you are in present tense and the second line is past. For it to make sense it should read "When you have your arms around me
    I can tell that we are ment to be."
    It is a sweet poem though, and I'm sure it is straight from the heart. Keep writing, keep imporoving.

  • 19 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Sorry I meant improving**

  • 19 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    Aw hun this is so sweet & cute, I think all of us would like a guy like that, Awww, I loved this poem made me smile hehe, You have great talent in ALL of these poems you've written its showcased well, take care hunn this is great work