Wow, I don't have the words to describe your poem. Its wonderful.

Aside from being funny in your other poem, you really have a way with words love. I am rather amazed by this poem. The imagery was so powerful and strong, I could picture this sad girl slowly wading into the water, not stopping or hesitating, just slowly walking forward to the death she wanted so badly. Wow. It is so painful to see other's end their own lives, because we would want to think that we could have helped them away from such evils as that, but more often than not they rather be alone. I was that little girl once, so I see both prospectives, but my heart still bleeds for the sweet people that take their own lifes. a well done poem love.

-Tainted Mikochan

That was so beautiful. The flow of it made me want to keep reading. I liked the rhyme scheme.
A
B
C
B

Thats how I usually write. Keep up the good work. 5/5

The imagery was great. I could see the whole thing. It had an excellent structure and flow. You used great detail also. 5/5 completely.

I really liked that poem, it made snese and felt right. It was a good piece
keep writing
love Tara-Kay

Wow. This piece of writing is amazing. Probaly my favourite of what I have read. The words used to describe were really good and the feelings and ideas you mixed together to give it a really good end result. the only thing id ever suggest is the flow a bit more,even though i think the flow is pretty good. An amazing piece.

Kat

Your imagery was beautiful and really brought the poem home for me. I have seem people I know and love fall victims for the need for perfection so I was touched to the heart by this poem of yours. You have a sage writers voice the speaks through your poems, and I like what it has to say. You had a great message, but you didn't yell it out, you embedded it in the poem and I liked that style. Nice work.

-Tainted

Beautiful job again. Great flow! It was very powerful.

Beautiful job again. Great flow! It was very powerful.

Wow. The language you used to express this chilling tale was absoulutely brillant. I loved the way it flowed, how the rhyming just made it smoother, and your use of vocabulary. This has to be my favorite of yours... just because I'm a Fantasy Gal. Great Job, I thought it was excellent.

Once again you amaze me with your talent to capture words. You are truly and simply a very wonderful writer. Many will, and probably do, admire you greatly, I am also one of them.
Always-
shattered and Broken

You are an AMAZING writer!! i haven't read poems of someone with your talent in a long time!

Vines of Emerald bind her heart
Golden hair flows free
Walking on the heated sand
Until she meets the sea

that was my favorite stanza right there!! it was a wonderful hook, it made me really want to read it. i thought the last stanza was wonderful too. great job. 5/5