Life 1

by Dante   Nov 23, 2005


Sitting in the car with nowhere to drive
Sleeping at the wheel and drinking "white russian"
Trying to understand are you still alive
Until one moment you are already crushing

Living on earth will take it's price
Every new day in this temporal strife
That is like game with rolling the dice
What kills first - smoking or life?

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  • 16 years ago

    by smiley

    I like this one better than 2

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Ha. I liked how you tried to rhyme Russian with crushing. Perhaps you could abbreviate it to chrusin'? Oh well. Up to you.

    The line that states: That is like game with rolling the dice.
    I felt it was choppy English. That is like THE game with rolling the dice maybe? Oh well. It was an overall good poem. I'll give it a four. No you don't have to return the favor. Only if you feel like it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Mello193

    What kills first-smoking or life

    I really liked this part..it was a short poem that was easy to read. Good job

  • 17 years ago

    by Shirani Graham

    Short and good expressions....

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