Really well expressed. Don't give up. Keep the battle up; keep your head high, and don't let anyone tell you different than what you are in reality. Do your best in all things; whatever you do, please, don't give up.

Big Hugs,

Michelle

Ooohh what a great last line!
Anyway, I really liked the descriptions and language especially in stanzas two and eight. The flow was good though out most of the poem. A good way to ensure good flow is going for similar syllable counts for each line, similar line length, and then reading them aloud just to make sure.
The last line as I've already said was great...only there is one mistake on there, "your" should be "you're."
Keep this all in mind and if this is still in progress let me know when you have edited it.
Very good write, this one impressed me a lot.
Take care,
Silver.

Omg... that literally gave me chills... that was sooo good... my fave part was: I love your cold emotion,
but fear your icy touch. GREAT way to display emotion that really sends the msg... that was great... wow... plz keep writing...

kaykay

This poem was so amazing i loved it so much especially the ending. great job.

Dang that was Great, thats what i call a Poem 5/5 great work

I think it's a great poem the way it is. I don't think you need to change it at all. I really liked the concept of everything of how you actually afraid of yourself and you don't know how to deal with it. amazing job. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.