Thanks a lot for the comment. I just put a new one up called Slowly Dying. Check it out.

This is a really good poem. For your first. I've never been one to try sucide. I don't have the balls honestly. Me and my boyfriend used to cut but we both promised each other we'd stop. Both of us cut recently but that was our last time. Well keep your head up and keep writing. You'll get better in time. x3

Woah, quite a chilling poem, but v.well written. 5/5 keep up the good work,
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This could be improved but for your first piece it is quite good.

Thanks for the comment on my poem. practice makes perfect jus keep up the good writing, i luv the structure of this poem. xxxxxxxxxx luciee